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In many countries around the world, life expectancy is increasing. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation.

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It is said that longevity is increased worldwide. while there are some benefits to being a longer period
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, I believe it brings more disadvantages. Obviously living longer brings great benefits.
Although
 I guess the most visible would be that many people in their seventies and eighties and even older, are able to enjoy a long and fulfilling retirement.
This
 means that they can do their favourite activities which were Impossible while working and bringing up a family,
such
 as travelling.
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eldery
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 boast about their experiences throughout their life
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 of that it is believed that they are a golden-ager who may be able to help the young generation to find a better way to live. But while there are lots of merits of life expectancy, all of which depend on being healthy and having money. Older people are likely to suffer from various
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 of illnesses
such
 as Alzheimer's disease and
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pain in their legs.
This
 makes it difficult to explore in the other hand, the cost of health services is so high that health insurance needs to improve. and including more kinds of
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. That might be hard for the government if the population involved a big number of old people. In conclusion, I would argue that the drawbacks of increasing life's duration do outweigh the merits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • demographics
  • societal development
  • healthcare system
  • pension funds
  • multigenerational
  • workforce
  • economic sustainability
  • intergenerational inequality
  • longevity
  • proactive policy
  • geriatrics
  • senior citizens
  • ageing population
  • fertility rates
  • dependency ratio
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