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do you think is important for children to be taught art?

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It is widely argued that
art
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 is an essential part of our society as it is the expression of one’s values and culture.
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children
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 should be undoubtedly given the opportunity of being taught
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 as
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 is a valuable tool to understand
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 in its whole meaning. Every kind of
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 is important, as
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art
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 we grew until becoming the society we are now.
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, architecture is an
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 that created the basis for our civilizations by creating the most modern building of today.The
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 of creating an alphabet has
made
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as
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communicating
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 with each other. Painting, singing, writing poems, and other forms of
arts
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, gave us the ability to deal with
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 when it is hard to stand it. Religions are another form of
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 as well, they were created to give us faith and hope to accompany us in our lives. I truly believe that
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 is
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fundamental
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 our
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 and
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 it is extremely important to be taught at school to
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, to raise the young generation with sensibility.
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 old knowledge includes many aspects of
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, and for
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 reason, we should teach
children
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 the importance of finding
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 in many of the things they do.
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, we should allow them to focus on what they like because
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 is already
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.
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,
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art
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 is fairly important to our
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, I believe that
children
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 should follow their path and focus on what
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make them feel happy and creative, rather than focus on one thing even so beautiful as
art
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 is.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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