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Topic : Some cities create housing areas by providing taller buildings. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better?

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In
this
 modern generation, each and every
people
 had the wish to live in a big
house
 full of furniture so
that is
 why now we are suffering from the issue of land for a living. Some groups of
people
 like to stay in a flat which has multiple floors as it is a little bit cheaper than living in a row
house
 while other
people
 believe that a
house
 must be decorated as per our taste so they want to build their
house
 as per their requirement.
To begin
 with, it is irrefutable fact that multi floors apartments are quite cheaper than bungalows so builders would like to build these types of flats as middle-class
people
 can easily buy and live a happy life with their families.
Moreover
, the benefits of the apartment are not only to spend happy life at a lower cost but it is
also
 beneficial for a lot of
people
 as in these kinds of flats builder can build more than 200 houses.
Secondly
, nowadays there is competition in the market to build high-rise buildings and get an attraction of
people
.
On the other hand
, rich
people
 demand to live in luxurious bungalows which maybe have a three or four-bedroom kitchen along with a garden area and a pool. So, they have to build their own villa which might be costlier as compared to others. In Conclusion, creating tall buildings in the cities and rural areas is more beneficial for the government and individuals because in single flats multiple families live whereas while constructing their own villa upper-class
people
 not only waste their money but
also
 reduce the size of the land. So I believe that creating a housing area by building taller buildings is a good thing.
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