Bullying is a big problem in many schools. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The bullying phenomenon is spreading all over the world.
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event usually consists of
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, violent behaviours or insults. Nowadays it is an important debate, which is worrying adults
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every day. In
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modern
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there are two shapes of bullying:
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the internet or physical. Social networks brought
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everyday life
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a virtual world projecting and exaggerating
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hurtful actions.
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type of bullying became more popular during the
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decade and caused a huge number of suicides. The main reason
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that tragic end is that "whatever touches the internet, remains in the internet". Another shocking feature is the unbelievable badness only justified by the fact that behind a screen is easier to do it. An example is represented by the "blue whale challenge" which came out
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years ago. It is a terrible perverse game where young guys and girls were addicted to
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dangerous actions.
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, the traditional shape of bullying is not disappeared and it usually happens at school, which can become the theatre of
discriminations
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and
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. I have personally seen many bullying scenes and I tried to interrupt it even if I was scared. My advice to new generations and others is to speak with adults and let them help
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because it is the only way to sort it out. Today
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phenomenon is thankfully decreasing because of restrictive rules and the growing up of awareness. In conclusion, physical bullying is dropping down, but at the same
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virtual one is growing.
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, the main solution is to keep increasing
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vigilance and social media rules beyond
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active in case it happens in front of us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bullying
  • Harassment
  • Intimidation
  • Diversity
  • Adolescent
  • Mimic
  • Aggressive behavior
  • Cyberbullying
  • Peer pressure
  • Social acceptance
  • Awareness
  • Conflict resolution
  • Peer mediation
  • Consequences
  • Respect
  • Kindness
  • Open communication
  • Vulnerable
  • Buddy system
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