SOME PEOPLE SAY THAT ADVERTISING IS EXTREMELY SUCCESSFUL AT PERSUADING US TO BUY THINGS. OTHER PEOPLE THINK THAT ADVERTISING IS SO COMMON THAT WE NO LONGER PAY ATTENTION TO IT

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highly effective at convincing us to purchase their products, others take the view that advertising is so frequent which made it less effective
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their decisions. In my opinion, advertising is influencing more than before. On one side of the argument, there are
people
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enormous advertisements on many platforms
such
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, smartphone applications and radios.
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people
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these adverts and do not like to watch
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an advert is presented, that individual will engage with other things till the show come back.
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long in a way
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the product being promoted. Despite the above arguments, I am of the view that commercials are very convincing. It is the best route
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the consumer.
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these days
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advertisements
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can be seen in
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media
application
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. Companies use popular
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famous
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follower see their
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.
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, advert producers have a special way to attract the consumer like they present
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humours
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seen. In conclusion, while both views
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held in society, I believe that
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are one of the most effective
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to make
people
know about the product and grab their attention.
However
, many individuals see that advertisements are no longer attractive as before because of
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long duration and
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boring content.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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