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All universities should have an equal number of male and female students in each subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #students
For
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 my
perspective
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i
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I
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 don't agree with
this
 topic that all
universities
 should have an equal number of male and female
students
 in each subject. Since
their
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they
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 can score good marks in
subject
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the subject
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. And it's not
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a must
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must
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just
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 to have
same
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a same
the same
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 number of
students
.
Students
 should only
concenterate
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concentrate
 on
studies
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their studies
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 rather than
focusing
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focus
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. On male and female
students
for
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in
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 my
view
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,view
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 there should be
seperate
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separate
 classes for male and female
students
.
For
instance
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 many male
students
 bully female
students
unnecessary
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.
Seperate
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Separate
 classes for male is
better
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a better
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 option in
universities
 all male
students
 should compare their marks with them only. If male and female
students
 study in
same
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the same
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universities
this
 will allow lots
chaos
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of chaos
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 in our society. But
in
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apply
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females are
also
 working in big companies and in
this
 modern world both are working in
same
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the same
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 environment be it
university
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a university
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 or
company
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a company
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.
Furthermore
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,Furthermore
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securities
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security
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 should be tight if male and female
student
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students
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 working or studying together like
cctv
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CCTV
 and good security guards. Nowadays many rape cases have been increasing
for
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in
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 women. So
woman
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woman's
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 safety should be
minority
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a minority
the minority
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. Henceforth parents should tell female
students
 or workers to dress properly. Because
of
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apply
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male
students
 or workers will not stop gazing
them
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at them
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. In
conclusion
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,conclusion
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 if
universities
wants
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want
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 to allow female and male
students
 to study together.
Their
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They
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 should have all the same female and male
students
 together in class. competition should be good if
their
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there
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 will have same to
same
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the same
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 number. In
universities
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,universities
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 teachers should teach how to give respect each other.
Their
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There
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 should
also
games
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be games
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 to be played with them. If there is free time
universities
 should definitely allow games because studying all time should make the person gets bored.
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