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It is better for children if the whole families (e.g., aunts, uncles and grandparents) are involved in the children's upbringing rather than their parents. Give your opinion

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Nowadays, it is a trend of staying in nuclear
families
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 because of the high cost of living. But there are still many people who think that
children
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's upbringing should be done in a joint family where they can get guidance from their uncles, aunts and grandparents. I completely agree with
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 notion as the
children
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 brought up in
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 houses have a positive approach towards
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 and they learn the importance of togetherness.
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 of all,
children
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 who stay with their grandparents tend to have a positive approach towards everything and they learn to value each and every small thing in their
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. Grandparents have already lived a
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 and have experienced many ups and downs in their
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.
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, a
child
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 staying with them can learn some valuable lessons from a very early age and that can be beneficial for them in their adulthood when they live by themselves. While the parents have a busy schedule due to their work, they often leave their
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 in play schools where one teacher is responsible for a group of
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.
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 they are not able to concentrate on each
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.
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, in the absence of their parents, uncle and aunt can come forward to take care of them. They act as a
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 parent to any
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. Growing up in
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families
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 can help the
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 understand the importance of togetherness. Sir Martin Luther King Jr.'s
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 is an inspiration for all of us which is well described in movies and a museum in Atlanta. In conclusion, we live in times where we often see
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 staying together due to many economical reasons,
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 a
child
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 to grow up in
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families
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 can be very beneficial.
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