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Some people believe that teaching music in schools is a vital part of growing up and human experience whilst others believe that teaching music in schools is a waste of time and resources

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In schools,
students
 learn how to analyse data, the grammar of a language and even the science behind biology but often
students
 graduate with basic skills for
a
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normal daily life. It is
therefore
 argued that school should teach a variety of subjects where a
student
 will be able to face the real
world
 with a better understanding of how things work,
for example
, economy, politics,
social
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 skills.
Although
 the
education
system
is design
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 to provide
students
 with the basic knowledge of certain subjects, the main aim for schools must be
about
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 teach
students
 skills to be used in the real
world
,
for example
, when a
student
 is being taught mathematics, apart from learning how to multiply and divide, the
student
 can learn how to solve problems through logic.
Moreover
, the shift in the ideology of
education
 must not end there but
also
extending
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 the syllabus, encompassing new subjects that could be more useful for
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life after graduation,
for instance
, finances.
However
, these changes take time and can be costly, mainly because educators must be trained and a proper
system
 to teach must
be establish
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 as well. To sum up, the current
education
system
 achieves to teach basic knowledge about mathematics and science but fails to prepare the
student
 for the real
world
. Even though the process to change or adapt the
education
system
 is rough and expensive, adding
finances
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education
 to the syllabus would be highly beneficial for both the
student
 and the
world
.
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