Some people believe that it is important to spend a lot of money on family celebrations. While others think it is a waste of money. Discuss both views.

I don'

want to spend

money

on family celebrations, especially for birthdays. I rather keep it and save it for the future expenses of my family than share it with other

people

. It is not bad to share but every

time

besides

when the

time

that you need help those

people

that you feed will not going to help you. They will be blind not to see that you're needing some help or they will be deaf and not listen to you when you ask them. They even tell you that they

also

need help but they will not make an effort to help you. So why not save the

money

so that when the

time

that you need it you have something to use to help yourself? Some

people

do it to show up to

people

that they have more

money

than others.

This

time

people

will do everything even borrow

money

just to have a grand celebration.

Then

after the party, they don'

even have a single peso in their pocket.

Then

they will now start to struggle about how are they going to pay for the

money

they use for the party. Sometimes we need to be realistic base on our capability. When we don'

have extra d

money

to spend try not. We don'

need to please all

people

. Celebrate with just your family and spend a bit but not too much. Think of the possibility of tomorrow. always save for the future not spend it just for not-so-important things. Be practical at all times to have better judgment.

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Lexical resource: 7.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

cherish
nurture
strengthen
bond
create memories
enjoyment
sense of belonging
reconnect
unite
traditions
create traditions
financial burden
priorities
moderation
budget
frugal
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