Some people believe that it is important to spend a lot of money on family celebrations. While others think it is a waste of money. Discuss both views.

I don'
t
want to spend
money
on family celebrations, especially for birthdays. I rather keep it and save it for the future expenses of my family than share it with other
people
. It is not bad to share but every
time
,
besides
when the
time
that you need help those
people
that you feed will not going to help you. They will be blind not to see that you're needing some help or they will be deaf and not listen to you when you ask them. They even tell you that they
also
need help but they will not make an effort to help you. So why not save the
money
so that when the
time
that you need it you have something to use to help yourself? Some
people
do it to show up to
people
that they have more
money
than others.
This
time
people
will do everything even borrow
money
just to have a grand celebration.
Then
after the party, they don'
t
even have a single peso in their pocket.
Then
they will now start to struggle about how are they going to pay for the
money
they use for the party. Sometimes we need to be realistic base on our capability. When we don'
t
have extra d
money
to spend try not. We don'
t
need to please all
people
. Celebrate with just your family and spend a bit but not too much. Think of the possibility of tomorrow. always save for the future not spend it just for not-so-important things. Be practical at all times to have better judgment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cherish
  • nurture
  • strengthen
  • bond
  • create memories
  • enjoyment
  • sense of belonging
  • reconnect
  • unite
  • traditions
  • create traditions
  • financial burden
  • priorities
  • moderation
  • budget
  • frugal
  • extravagant
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