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The two tables below show statistics of workers of foreign and US birth in the United States last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The data illustrates the comparison between
workers
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 of foreign and US birth in the United States
last
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 year. Overall, despite the huge difference in size between the two groups, they showed quite similar patterns in almost every division, especially in the
unemployment
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 rate. At
first
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 glance, the immigrant male
workers
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 suffered a lower
unemployment
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 rate than their counterparts who were natively born in the US ( 8. 9% compares to 10. 6%).
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, interestingly, their female groups contained opposite patterns with the female workforce from the foreign-birth group with a higher rate of
unemployment
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 than the USA-birth female
workers
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, respectively, 11. 1% and 8. 5%. It can be seen that the figure of people who were involved in working and were US-birth is much higher at 129, 533 compared to 24, 357 of the foreign-birth group.
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, most of the younger age groups (from 16 to 34) of the US-birth
workers
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 suffered a higher than the similar age individuals in the foreign-birth workforce (from 10. 2% to 18. 7%, compared to 9. 3% to 15. 9%).
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, the older workforce of migrants showed higher marginal
unemployment
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 than natively US-birth
workers
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( from 8. 9% to 9. 6% compared to 6. 4% to 7. 9%).
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