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The two tables below show statistics of workers of foreign and US birth in the United States last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The data illustrates the comparison between
workers
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 of foreign and US birth in the United States
last
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 year.
Over all
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, despite the huge difference in size between
two
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the two
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 groups, they showed quite similar patterns in almost every division, especially in
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unemployment
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the unemployment
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 rate. At
first
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the immigrant
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 male
worker
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workers
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 suffered a lower
unemployment
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 rate
that
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the
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 counterparts who
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 born in the US ( 8. 9% compares to 10. 6%).
In contrast
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, interestingly, their female groups contained opposite patterns with
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the female
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 workforce from
foreign-birth
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the foreign-birth
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 group with a higher rate of
unemployment
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 than the USA-birth female
workers
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, respectively, 11. 1% and 8. 5%. It can be seen that the figure of people who
involved
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 in working and were US-birth
are
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 much higher at 129, 533 compared to 24, 357 of the foreign-birth group.
On the other hand
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, most
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 younger age groups (from 16 to 34) of the US-birth
workers
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 suffered a higher than the similar age individuals in the foreign-birth workforce (from 10. 2% to 18. 7%, compared to 9. 3% to 15. 9%).
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, the older workforce of migrants showed a higher
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unemployment
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 than natively US-birth
workers
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( from 8. 9% to 9. 6% compared to 6. 4% to 7. 9%).
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