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The two tables below show statistics of workers of foreign and US birth in the United States last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The data illustrates the comparison between
workers
 of foreign and US birth in the United States
last
 year.
Over all
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, despite the huge difference in size between
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 groups, they showed quite similar patterns in almost every division, especially in
unemployment
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the unemployment
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 rate. At
first
 glance,
immigrant
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the immigrant
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 male
worker
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workers
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 suffered a lower
unemployment
 rate
that
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 counterparts who
natively
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 born in the US ( 8. 9% compares to 10. 6%).
In contrast
, interestingly, their female groups contained opposite patterns with
female
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the female
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 workforce from
foreign-birth
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the foreign-birth
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 group with a higher rate of
unemployment
 than the USA-birth female
workers
, respectively, 11. 1% and 8. 5%. It can be seen that the figure of people who
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 in working and were US-birth
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 much higher at 129, 533 compared to 24, 357 of the foreign-birth group.
On the other hand
, most
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 younger age groups (from 16 to 34) of the US-birth
workers
 suffered a higher than the similar age individuals in the foreign-birth workforce (from 10. 2% to 18. 7%, compared to 9. 3% to 15. 9%).
However
, the older workforce of migrants showed a higher
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unemployment
 than natively US-birth
workers
( from 8. 9% to 9. 6% compared to 6. 4% to 7. 9%).
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