IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 3.5

Some people believe that companies should manufacture products that last for a long time.Others feel that the emphasis should be on producing goods that are cheap.Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #companies #products #time #emphasis #goods
It is widely known that with the development of modern technology,multinational companies produce
variety
Add an article
a variety
show examples
 of
products
 nowadays. Most of these items make life easier and customers tend to buy those according to their requirements.
However
,there are lots of arguments regarding the
last
 longing
products
 and the cheap goods.In
following
Add an article
the following
show examples
essay
Add a comma
,essay
show examples
 I will discuss both views and suggest my opinion. Let's begin with why do
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
industries manufacture inexpensive
products
?
Change the punctuation
.
show examples
Because they target
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
people in developing countries as customers. Those nationalities want to purchase
brand new
Add a hyphen
brand-new
show examples
products
 with affordable prices that
suitable
Add a missing verb
are suitable
show examples
 for their own income.
Therefore
 cheap
products
 are essential while expensive
long lasting
Add a hyphen
long-lasting
show examples
 items are unbearable for them.
On the other hand
, expensive goods which
required
Add a missing verb
are required
show examples
 to fulfil our day
today
Correct your spelling
to day
show examples
 needs are
environmental
Change the adjective
environmentally
show examples
 friendly.Because they can use
long
Change the article
a long
show examples
time
 without replacement. Most
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
companies use plastic as a raw material
although
 it causes environmental pollution. So the goods which can be used expanded duration of
time
 will minimize the over usage of plastics.According to that utensils which can be used
long
Change the article
a long
show examples
time
 is a way to maintain
clean
Add an article
a clean
show examples
 environment. To sum up ,
although
 there are arguments on
long lasting
Add a hyphen
long-lasting
show examples
 and cheap
products
 both are essential for us.According to my point of view
production
Correct article usage
the production
show examples
 of items that can be used
long
Change the article
a long
show examples
time
 is more suitable than
produce
Wrong verb form
producing
show examples
 multiple cheap things which are unfriendly to the environment.
Submitted by nayomiathukorala40 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • disposable goods
  • economic benefits
  • frequent replacements
  • technological adaptation
  • manufacturing affordability
  • environmental responsibility
  • longevity
  • minimize costs
  • wider society
What to do next:
Look at other essays: