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• Some people suggest higher education should be funded by the government, while others think that students should pay the course fees themselves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #education #government #students #course #fees
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Higher
education
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 has become privileged in
this
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 modern world. Some
people
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 approve of the fact that the
government
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 should fund higher
education
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 whereas others think that students should pay for their courses. I strongly support the fact that
education
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 should be free but
also
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 I believe that
education
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 should be payable which I will elaborate in the below essay. In the actual world, poverty is still present and poor
people
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 may have the potential to succeed but ,
unfortunately
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 they do not have enough funds to complete tertiary
education
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.
These
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is
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 the sad facts about life. I strongly recommend that
government
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 should grant those children who are in need and provide scholarships to those students.
On the contrary
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, I believe that the
government
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 should be able to get a source of funds by making tertiary
education
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. Lecturers and tutors get high revenue so I believe that to be able to pay them, the
government
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 should make higher
education
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 chargeable. In a conclusion, I believe that
government
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 should continue charging tertiary
education
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, but
however
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, poor
people
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 should get the opportunity to do
further
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education
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, so the
government
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 should provide scholarships or grants to those
people
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.
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