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• Some people suggest higher education should be funded by the government, while others think that students should pay the course fees themselves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Higher
education
 has become privileged in
this
 modern world. Some
people
 approve of the fact that the
government
 should fund higher
education
 whereas others think that students should pay for their courses. I strongly support the fact that
education
 should be free but
also
 I believe that
education
 should be payable which I will elaborate in the below essay. In the actual world, poverty is still present and poor
people
 may have the potential to succeed but ,
unfortunately
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 they do not have enough funds to complete tertiary
education
.
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 the sad facts about life. I strongly recommend that
government
 should grant those children who are in need and provide scholarships to those students.
On the contrary
, I believe that the
government
 should be able to get a source of funds by making tertiary
education
. Lecturers and tutors get high revenue so I believe that to be able to pay them, the
government
 should make higher
education
 chargeable. In a conclusion, I believe that
government
 should continue charging tertiary
education
, but
however
, poor
people
 should get the opportunity to do
further
education
, so the
government
 should provide scholarships or grants to those
people
.
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