Many young children have unmonitored access to the internet and are using the internet to socialize with others. What problems do children face while being online without the supervision of parents? How can these problems be solved?

The graph illustrates the information about units of electricity by fuel source in Australia and
France
from 1980 to 2000. From an overall perspective, Australia mainly use coal to get electricity in 2000 and
France
often use nuclear to get capability in 2000. Looking at the pie chart in more detail, the total production of units in Australia in 1980 is 100.
Besides
, the fuel source includes 10 for coat 20 for natural gas 20 for
hydropower
and 50 for coal.
However
, the number has a dramatic change in 2000, the overall data grow up to 170
system
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, which
contain
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130 for coal, 36 for
hydropower
, 2 for oil, and 2 for natural gas.
On the other hand
, the total production in
France
in 1980 are 90 crew, including 25
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coal, 20 for oil, 25
of
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natural gas, 5 for
hydropower
, and 15
in
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nuclear power. Whereas, there has a significant difference from 2000 in
France
, which overall number rise to 180
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and contain 126 nuclear power, 2
hydropower
and natural function, 25 for oil, and 25 for coal.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unmonitored access
  • inappropriate content
  • cyberbullying
  • emotional and psychological distress
  • privacy risks
  • identity theft
  • exploitation
  • addiction
  • time management issues
  • parental controls
  • monitoring software
  • online safety
  • cyberbullying signs
  • open communication
  • boundaries and rules
  • acceptable online behavior
  • healthy habits
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