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In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Nowadays, many people leave their
hometown
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 and move to
big
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the big
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city
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 to live and work because they think
life
 in the
city
 will be better than
the
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 small villages.
However
, many benefits so living in the countryside
also
 has
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will
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 discuss
about
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the primacy and drawbacks when you live in a small community. There are a lot of reasons why small community, some of them are that the atmosphere here is very peaceful
,
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 and that the people who live here are very sociable.
In contrast
, if you live in a big
city
, you will have to face busy
life
, polluted air and
jaffic
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traffic
 jams at rush hour.
In addition
, when you live in
small
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 village, you don't need to for food, vegetable or fruit because you can in your garden.
Thus
, having a peaceful
life
 in the countryside is one of the good choices when you feel bored with
city
life
.
Beside
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 the advantages of living in a small
community
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 it
also
 has more bad effects,
for instance
, the
infracture
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fracture
 is not modern, there are few universities so
that
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students have to leave home to study in the
city
 and job opportunities are still low.
Therefore
,
life
 here is so quiet and few exercises so it
difficult
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 for people to develop themselves. To sum up, living in a small village has more benefits and
disadvantges
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disadvantages
 so you should choose
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 want to live here.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sense of community
  • Bond
  • Close-knit
  • Tight-knit
  • Belonging
  • Familiarity
  • Security
  • Support system
  • Social connections
  • Look out for
  • Have someone's back
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