Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works of art by using a computer.

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Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works of art by using a computer.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

In modern times, young adults are spending less time with their families and more time with their friends. Why has this change occured? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?

All large companies should provide sports and social facilities to the local community. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree

In many countries today, crime novel and TV crime dramas are becoming more popular. Why do you think are these books and TV shows are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?