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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the sahara or the Antarctica. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? (12GT-1; Vinoth M A) 11/01/21

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Today
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 more and more
tourists
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 are visiting
places
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 where
conditions
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 are difficult,
such
Linking Words
 as the
Use synonyms
sahara
Change the capitalization
Sahara
show examples
 or
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
Antarctica
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. What are the
benefits
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 and
disadvantages
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 for
tourists
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 who
visit
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such
Linking Words
places
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?
Today
Use synonyms
 more and more
tourists
Use synonyms
 are visiting
places
Use synonyms
 where
conditions
Use synonyms
 are difficult,
such
Linking Words
 as the
Use synonyms
sahara
Change the capitalization
Sahara
show examples
 or
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
Antarctica
Use synonyms
. What are the
benefits
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 and
disadvantages
Use synonyms
 for
tourists
Use synonyms
 who
visit
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
places
Use synonyms
?
Today
Use synonyms
 more and more
tourists
Use synonyms
 are visiting
places
Use synonyms
 where
conditions
Use synonyms
 are difficult,
such
Linking Words
 as the
Use synonyms
sahara
Change the capitalization
Sahara
show examples
 or
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
Antarctica
Use synonyms
. What are the
benefits
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 and
disadvantages
Use synonyms
 for
tourists
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 who
visit
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
places
Use synonyms
?
Today
Use synonyms
 more and more
tourists
Use synonyms
 are visiting
places
Use synonyms
 where
conditions
Use synonyms
 are difficult,
such
Linking Words
 as the
Use synonyms
sahara
Change the capitalization
Sahara
show examples
 or
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
Antarctica
Use synonyms
. What are the
benefits
Use synonyms
 and
disadvantages
Use synonyms
 for
tourists
Use synonyms
 who
visit
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
places
Use synonyms
?
Today
Use synonyms
 more and more
tourists
Use synonyms
 are visiting
places
Use synonyms
 where
conditions
Use synonyms
 are difficult,
such
Linking Words
 as the
Use synonyms
sahara
Change the capitalization
Sahara
show examples
 or
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
Antarctica
Use synonyms
. What are the
benefits
Use synonyms
 and
disadvantages
Use synonyms
 for
tourists
Use synonyms
 who
visit
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
places
Use synonyms
?
Today
Use synonyms
 more and more
tourists
Use synonyms
 are visiting
places
Use synonyms
 where
conditions
Use synonyms
 are difficult,
such
Linking Words
 as the
Use synonyms
sahara
Change the capitalization
Sahara
show examples
 or
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
Antarctica
Use synonyms
. What are the
benefits
Use synonyms
 and
disadvantages
Use synonyms
 for
tourists
Use synonyms
 who
visit
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
places
Use synonyms
?
Today
Use synonyms
 more and more
tourists
Use synonyms
 are visiting
places
Use synonyms
 where
conditions
Use synonyms
 are difficult,
such
Linking Words
 as the
Use synonyms
sahara
Change the capitalization
Sahara
show examples
 or
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
Antarctica
Use synonyms
. What are the
benefits
Use synonyms
 and
disadvantages
Use synonyms
 for
tourists
Use synonyms
 who
visit
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
places
Use synonyms
?
Today
Use synonyms
 more and more
tourists
Use synonyms
 are visiting
places
Use synonyms
 where
conditions
Use synonyms
 are difficult,
such
Linking Words
 as the
Use synonyms
sahara
Change the capitalization
Sahara
show examples
 or
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
Antarctica
Use synonyms
. What are the
benefits
Use synonyms
 and
disadvantages
Use synonyms
 for
tourists
Use synonyms
 who
visit
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
places
Use synonyms
?
Today
Use synonyms
 more and more
tourists
Use synonyms
 are visiting
places
Use synonyms
 where
conditions
Use synonyms
 are difficult,
such
Linking Words
 as the
Use synonyms
sahara
Change the capitalization
Sahara
show examples
 or
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
Antarctica
Use synonyms
. What are the
benefits
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 and
disadvantages
Use synonyms
 for
tourists
Use synonyms
 who
visit
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
places
Use synonyms
?
Today
Use synonyms
 more and more
tourists
Use synonyms
 are visiting
places
Use synonyms
 where
conditions
Use synonyms
 are difficult,
such
Linking Words
 as the
Use synonyms
sahara
Change the capitalization
Sahara
show examples
 or
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
Antarctica
Use synonyms
. What are the
benefits
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 and
disadvantages
Use synonyms
 for
tourists
Use synonyms
 who
visit
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
places
Use synonyms
?
Today
Use synonyms
 more and more
tourists
Use synonyms
 are visiting
places
Use synonyms
 where
conditions
Use synonyms
 are difficult,
such
Linking Words
 as the
Use synonyms
sahara
Change the capitalization
Sahara
show examples
 or
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
Antarctica
Use synonyms
. What are the
benefits
Use synonyms
 and
disadvantages
Use synonyms
 for
tourists
Use synonyms
 who
visit
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
places
Use synonyms
?

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unique experiences
  • remote and challenging locations
  • typical tourist destinations
  • sense of achievement
  • overcoming challenges
  • ecosystems and wildlife
  • educational opportunities
  • adventure tourism
  • physical activity and endurance
  • support local economies
  • environmental considerations
  • financial costs
  • specialized equipment
  • extreme weather conditions
  • remote locations
  • environmental impact
  • degradation of ecosystems
  • limited access to healthcare
  • emergency services
  • personal safety
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