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In the future all cars,buses and trucks will be driver less. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages

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Driver
 assistance system is getting more and more common in recent years especially after Tesla
cars
 came up to
commercial
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 market. Beyond
driver
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 assistance
system
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systems
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, vehicle manufacturers have been trying to make a fully autonomous
vehicle
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vehicles
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. Some individuals insist that
driver less
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cars
 will be neither reliable nor legal. They say that artificial
intelligent
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 for driving autonomous
cars
 could malfunction, which could result in killing not only the
driver
 but
also
 other people.
In addition
, it will be controversial if an accident's compensation is on the passenger or the
car
 manufacturer.
However
,
human
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driver
 isn't 100% reliable either.
Although
 there are some flaws in the technology, it will be still
reliable
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than
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 human drivers. According to
a
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statistics, it's shown that the majority of
car
 accidents were caused by
human
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humans
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not
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 by traffic systems or
car's
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car
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 defects.
Hence
, the autonomous
car
 will be a lot
safter
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safer
softer
 than
human driven
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cars
. The legal problem that who is in charge of the accident should be still solved by discussions in society. I reckon that
the
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car
 manufacturers should cover accidents caused by
cars
 as long as the
car
 owner followed the requirement for
car
 maintenance.
Therefore
, I believe that the advantage of driverless vehicles
outweight
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outweigh
 the disadvantages of them. There are always pros and cons
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technologies
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technology
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. But having negative aspects shouldn't be an obstacle
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realisation
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to
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 the technology.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Driverless technology
  • Traffic efficiency
  • Cybersecurity
  • Data privacy
  • Infrastructure
  • Economic impacts
  • Accessibility
  • Social inclusion
  • Emissions
  • Fuel consumption
  • Ethical dilemmas
  • Human error
  • Congestion
  • Independence
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