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Large numbers of visitors can endanger ancient archealogical sites such Machu Picchu. in your opinion, is it more important to try to preserve such site or to allow public access to them ?

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Keeping ancient archaeological sites preserved is more important than having a lot of tourists visit them.
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different ways
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 as making a set of documentary programs , and a lot of high-quality pictures . Preserving these sites is important for two reasons. First
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 when visitors visit these spots they might break some area they
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is not important
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a lot of unknown values . for ,example in the city some visitors broke some rocks and fir them
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it has some
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writing on them in an old language
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some university groups claim these rocks may
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 them to discover who
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5000 years
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 , some visitors may have political and economic intentions to change the reality and identity of
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 location .
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political parties try to change some facts about one famous spot
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to have credit in their election most
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ordinary people tend to believe that because these political people have free access to
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 location and try to show that they have pure truth. for ,that we have to be more careful and not allow those frauds to the truth.
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 , old sites should always be under government supervision and control in all the ways that allow these locations to be in the same form for more discoveries and new explorations that may solve the mystery of the past.
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