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In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

#countries #schools #student #behavior
Nowadays, many countries
over
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all over
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 the world have the same problem of students' bad behaviour in schools, even sometimes accompanied by violence towards teachers or school staff.
This
 issue is very complicated and doesn't have an immediate, permanent solution.
However
, in
this
 essay, I will try to find the root of the problem and suggest possible solutions.
Firstly
, I would like
to begin
 exploring the problem from the family.
Children
 are like a sponge and absorb everything they see, feel and experience. I believe that parents have a major impact on their
children
. In my opinion, if parents behave properly with respect between themself and towards their
children
, the latest will behave the same way everywhere, not just in school.
Secondly
, the current young generation is exposed to harmful content on TV, social media and video games. The cruelty that they
expose
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 to every day reflects on their behaviour. They try to move the virtual world to real life; sometimes,
this
 phenomenon crosses borders and can injure them physically or mentally.
However
, not all is so bad; we can improve or decrease the harmful factors that influence our
children
. We have to be more interested and involved in our
children
's lives. We need to spend more free time with families outdoors, hiking, camping, holidays and
vacation
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. Parent meetings in school and
wats up
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WhatsApp
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 groups must be part of our life to understand what happens with
children
 and in class. Technology is running in front of us, and there are a lot of tools for controlling the social media of our
children
 to decrease unwanted content or members in
children
's accounts. We can remotely control the gadgets of our
children
 and limit the gadget's time
according to
 the agreements. I understand that my point of view is not the same as somebody's opinion. The solutions that I provided here is not suit for everybody, but the main subject is to be more involved in our
children
's life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parental guidance
  • discipline
  • moral guidance
  • social media
  • detrimental
  • bullying
  • peer pressure
  • overcrowded
  • disengagement
  • disruptive behavior
  • behavioral policies
  • code of conduct
  • parental involvement
  • social and emotional learning (SEL)
  • empathy
  • responsible decisions
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