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Some people think visitors to others countries should initiate local customers and behaviors. Some people disagree; they think the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss the two views and give your opinion.

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Travel has been always a good way to meet new
people
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 and discover new cultures. Some
people
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 believe that tourist needs to initiate local
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 and traditions while others think that the
host
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 state must welcome everyone and every
culture
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. In my opinion, I disagreed that visitors need to imitate the local population
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, I
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 believe that respect for other's cultures and traditions is a must . on the one hand,visitors need to integrate into the local society of the
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country
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 and try their
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,food and traditions. In
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 ,way it will be easy for them to understand local
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 and enjoy their vacation. For ,example in the
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 World cup ,2022 many travellers experienced Arabic
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 and Arabic food even though alcohol was forbidden but
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 enjoy the game. One of the German supporters in an interview expressed his happiness and how much he did enjoy the
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 and that it was a unique experience for him.
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, the
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country
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 needs to welcome everyone and accept
different
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the different
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cultures
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culture
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.
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, you can't impose your
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 on others because every part of the world have it is own
culture
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 and it is its own belief that makes us different. For ,example some
countries
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 impose some specific
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 to visit them and that make visitors afraid to visit those
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 of that, the number of tourists is very low and
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 have some stereotype about those
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. To conclude, visiting new
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 and meeting new
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 will increase your knowledge about the
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 of
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country
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.tourist need to respect the
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country
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 but they don't have to imitate them beside the
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country
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 needs to give more freedom and accept
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