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Computer have changed the way people study. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using computers as study aids? Keyword : Computers / Study

#computer #people #study #computers #aids #keyword
Computers
 have made
significant
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 in our life,especially in education and research.It reinvented the way society learns.It is one of the major inventions
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 humans.
However
,
computers
also
brings
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 some disadvantages to our lives.
Hence
 it is mandatory to ponder over the advantages and disadvantages of
computers
 and
this
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dealts
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deals
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 the matter in detail to come to a logical conclusion.
Firstly
,the most striking merit of
computers
 is that it is easily accessible. To be precise,using
computers
 folks can access
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thousands of book titles,ebooks,videos and much more.Nowadays,searching
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internet
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the internet
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 provides faster
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 than from anyone or any books.Any information can be attainable within just a click by anyone who
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computer
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 and internet connection.
Students
 can find multiple research forums and discussions forum online which will help them to understand better.On top of it,People uses
computer
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a computer
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 for developing various skills.Precisely,folks from any age or any place or any background can learn using
computer
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the computer
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.There is no age limit as in schools and offline platforms.In
this
 modern era,many people are finding new talents
usings
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using
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 youtube
vidoes
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videos
video
 and several blog posts.To cite an example,According to the
survery
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survey
 conducted by Harvard
university
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,a sudden increase in online learning happened during the time of
pandemic
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the pandemic
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 .
Hence
,
computer
have
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 changed the way of
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studying
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 because it is attainable and
a
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have
pletora
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plethora
 of options.
On the contrary
,of the many
demerits
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 the most important one is
students
 became lazy.In detail,nowadays most education systems are
computer based
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 so
students
 have no opportunity to learn mathematical skills and even small subtraction and addition they cannot count without
computer
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.
This
 tendency will reduce the intellectual capability and creativity of the
students
.
For instance
,if a science project was given to
students
 ,they will definitely look it up
in
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 online browsing sites rather than thinking
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 own.
Furthermore
,
computer
 game addiction is another demerit.To elaborate,folks spend their time on
computer
 games rather than any outdoor games which adversely affects their physical and mental
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.Spending too much time on
computer
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the computer
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 or
computer
 games can cause stress to the eyes and brains of
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individuals and sitting in a fixed position
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 young age cause major spinal issues to
body
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. To
enscapsulate
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encapsulate
encapsulated
,having scrutinized,both the merits and demerits,I believe that
that
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computers
 have helped the world of learning by making education accessible to society all over the world.It helps to reduce the educational equity gap.Certainly,I am hopeful that
computers
 are used for good only.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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