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It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the country side. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

#city #life #country #side
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Some
people
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 prefer to live in the urban
city
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, while others like to live in the
countryside
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.
This
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 essay will prob the information about living in both
countryside
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 and urban
areas
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.
To begin
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 with, there are many
people
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 who admire looking at the night sky and breathing pure air, those
people
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 living in urban
areas
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 are awkward for them. To explain more, the atmosphere of the
city
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 is not good due to the factors which take the town a place for them.
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, because of more lights in the
city
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 inhabitants could not look at the night sky.
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, there are many advantages to living in a town like providing facilities
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 as restaurants, hospitals, schools and markets.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 love to live in the
countryside
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 for numerous reasons. The main culprit is quiet and less crowded since far away from the
city
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. The
second
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 reason is the
people
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 who used to live in rural
areas
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 tend to cultivate their fruit and vegetables , for
this
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 , the reason they are strong and healthy ,
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, milk and chees that taken from cows and goats. Despite the convenience in rural
areas
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, there are some disadvantages which as lacking good education and healthcare facilities. To sum up, there are many privileges to living in each area and some cons as well. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
people
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 who said that living in an urban area is better than
countryside
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 because I could not live away from facilities like hospitals and markets .
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