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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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Nowadays there is a sharp increase
of
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 the population worldwide. More people
requires
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have
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more
food
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 to satisfy the
esigence
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exigence
residence
exigency
 of eating of everyone. A general thought to supply at the request of what to eat is
introduce
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insects
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in
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 the diet of a person as edible
food
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. On the other side, introducing
insects
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in
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 a diet is not always seen as a good way, as they can be dangerous to a person's health. According to my vision about
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issues
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, I can't
be completely disagree
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 with the eating of
insect
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insects
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, as in some countries,
specially
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 where there is
a
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severe poverty and there are
not
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 modern instruments to provide
food
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, bugs could be the only expedient for people to survive.
Altough
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 they could represent the only way to eat something, I think
that is
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, at the same level, important to understand which
are
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the
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insects
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 that can be
edibile
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edible
, and which are not. In fact, the belief that some bugs are dangerous is true, because some of them can be poisonous, as for
istance
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instance
, some scorpions that
even
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dead
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 can conserve their poison. One way to use
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this
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 poisonous bugs as edible
food
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 could be
extract
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before
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them before
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the
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they
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 poison away.
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, the principal reason for eating
insects
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 is not adopted as a solution to guarantee
the
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apply
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food
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 for everyone, is
the
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cultural prejudice.
Specialy
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Specially
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 for the modern cultures l is
impossibile
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impossible
 to think to eat some animals, without
have
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 a profound disgust, because they are too used to thinking about
food
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 as something that can not come from the wilderness.
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