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Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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undoubtedly, personal training is the most part of education lives, students should spend part of their time in sports space. in
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, the exercise can help with lessons. my coach told me when you have
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 mind that you had a healthy life.
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 when I was a student at the same time I was a member of a university team
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 I had workout every day and affected my studies
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, nobody can't study all day because the mind needs to recover as same as the muscle. many studies have shown about
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 we must more focus on train to conclude, the basis of my view is based on two reasons student needs to have some time for exercise
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 it shouldn't ruin academic education
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