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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the history for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human's life. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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It is often argued that
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 carries the influential elements of learning whilst according to other masses, there
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 significant in
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 to learn. I personally believe that
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 can become a precious source of learning not only about our past but
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 our future.
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 essay will discuss both sides and will give opinions. There are some modern thoughts about learning from
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 which
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 as backward. According to them,
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 is all about past lives and happenings and we cannot relate it to our contemporary period, there is nothing worth it.
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, to learn something new, we must focus on the current period and keep moving forward. I personally don't believe in
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 situation because in my opinion, if we neglect our past we cannot build up our future. There are some recent research demonstrates that
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 those nations who ignored their past
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 could not build up their nation.
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, to some
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 has profound importance because they consider
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 as one of the valuable sources of learning about human life.
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, human civilization has experienced so many ups and downs and to know about the evaluation of civilization, we must study
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.
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, studying
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 can enhance our cognitive function
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 and reasonable qualities. According to some critics,
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 is the only source of knowledge which could help us to learn something unknown and unseen from our past and make us efficient in reasoning and understanding. On balance, I believe that we should include
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 compulsory in the national curriculum, so our pupils can learn about the past and create our future.
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