Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?
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sites
impacting
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impact
the
society and the individual in Correct article usage
apply
negative
manner, I argue that its certainly Change the article
a negative
impacting
social life negatively Wrong verb form
impact
however
, it has Add the comma(s)
,however
positive
impact on individuals.
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a positive
innovation
of Add an article
the innovation
technology
and reach
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the reach
to
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of
smart phones
by common Correct your spelling
smartphones
people
has increased the number of people
using social networking sites
significantly in recent years. Social networking sites
such
as Facebook, Twitter and many more became basic needs of people
. This
revolution in technology
has brought many benefits to people
. Now people
to people
interaction have
increased and it has no boundaries. They can easily talk to other Correct subject-verb agreement
has
people
who are located at
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in
different
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a different
the different
part
of the globe. Distance, time zone, Fix the agreement mistake
parts
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and boarders
boarders
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borders
doesn’t
matter anymore. Change the verb form
don’t
This
interaction helps them to enhance their knowledge, grow their business and much more. People
can create any type social
cause over these social media platforms and get other Change preposition
of social
people
’s support from
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apply
world-wide
.
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worldwide
this
improvement in technology
has benefitted the
individuals, it has some drawbacks Correct article usage
apply
on
society. Change preposition
for
For example
, now people
spend more time on these types of platforms rather than spending time in society or social activities. Face to face
interaction is minimized, which certainly brings Add a hyphen
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a gap
gap
in Fix the agreement mistake
gaps
local
social Add an article
a local
the local
group
. Many old, aged Fix the agreement mistake
groups
people
are not able to cope with technology
and find it very difficult to interact with other people
.
In conclusion, As with any other invention, technology
also
has some drawbacks, however
if Add a comma
,however
people
make smart choices they can surely get rid of these drawbacks and get maximum
benefit Add an article
the maximum
of
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from
this
technology
revolution in the form of social networking sites
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite