Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

While many believe that social networking
sites
impacting
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both
the
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society and the individual in
negative
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manner, I argue that its certainly
impacting
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social life negatively
however
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, it has
positive
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a positive
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impact on individuals. With
innovation
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the innovation
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of
technology
and
reach
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the reach
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to
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of
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smart phones
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smartphones
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by common
people
has increased the number of
people
using social networking
sites
significantly in recent years. Social networking
sites
such
as Facebook, Twitter and many more became basic needs of
people
.
This
revolution in
technology
has brought many benefits to
people
. Now
people
to
people
interaction
have
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increased and it has no boundaries. They can easily talk to other
people
who are located
at
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different
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a different
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part
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of the globe. Distance, time zone,
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and boarders
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boarders
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doesn’t
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matter anymore.
This
interaction helps them to enhance their knowledge, grow their business and much more.
People
can create any type
social
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of social
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cause over these social media platforms and get other
people
’s support
from
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world-wide
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. While
this
improvement in
technology
has benefitted
the
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individuals, it has some drawbacks
on
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for
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society.
For example
, now
people
spend more time on these types of platforms rather than spending time in society or social activities.
Face to face
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interaction is minimized, which certainly brings
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a gap
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gap
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in
local
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a local
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social
group
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. Many old, aged
people
are not able to cope with
technology
and find it very difficult to interact with other
people
. In conclusion, As with any other invention,
technology
also
has some drawbacks,
however
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if
people
make smart choices they can surely get rid of these drawbacks and get
maximum
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benefit
of
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from
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this
technology
revolution in the form of social networking
sites
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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