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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Crime
 rates are rising considerably in the
last
 decade. While some
people
 think that making longer jail
sentences
 are the best
way
 to decrease
crime
, others are
condiering
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considering
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 the solution. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both views and explain why I stand with the latter group. On the one hand, the
first
 group believe that giving longer prison
sentences
 is the best
way
. Knowing the consequences before doing the
crime
 would deter a person from doing it.
For example
, a man who is trying to steal would think about the long jail sentence
how
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 it is going to
effect
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 his life in the future,
therefore
,
this
 might prevent him from
contiueing
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continuing
 the action. If
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 not applied,
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burglars
burgers
 would continue to commit illegal acts because they would underestimate the short
sentences
.
On the other hand
, the latter group are suggesting other alternative solutions. They believe the main reason behind
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increasing
crime
 rate is unemployment. Criminals are committing illegal
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 because they are in need of money. Since there are
no
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 enough jobs, criminals would find other forms to gain an income, and
this
 form could come in form of theft and shoplifting. The more unemployed
people
, the more criminals and higher
crime
 rates. I would suggest giving credit for volunteer work would result in
people
 volunteering and
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gaining
 personal and ethical skills
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which
way
 it would lower crimes.
This
way
 will give
people
 who are willing to steal another
way
 to have money, which is easier and does not
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 their future life negatively. In conclusion, high
crime
 rates
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 a serious problem that
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 to not be overlooked.
Although
 setting
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 prison
sentences
 would
parially
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, volunteering would be a more effective
way
 since it solves the root problem.
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