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Some people think governments should spend as much money as possible exploring outer space. Others argue they should spend the money for poor people. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

#people #governments #money #space
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it's often considered that
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 must devote funds to space exploration. whereas, some
peple
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people
 argue that the federal authorities should spend money in order to tackle poverty.
although
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 it is important to dedicate
resourses
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resources
 to
explore
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exploring
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 the galaxy, I believe that
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 has to pay attention to supporting
under
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privilaged
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privileged
 citizens. on
one
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 hand,
one
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 of the aims of exploring
the
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apply
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space is to find
pout
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out
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wether
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whether
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 is it possible to find other planets to live
or
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on or
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 not. it is forecasted
thath
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that
 the earth might be
unhabitate
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inhabitants
 in about a decade
as a result
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 of an environmental
castrophe
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catastrophe
in
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on
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 a global scale which is caused by
toxix
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toxic
 waste, air
poloution
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pollution
, carbon footprint and climate
crisis
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crises
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such
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 as changing water patterns and
temprature
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temperature
temperatures
 soar.
therefor
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Therefore
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 it sounds vital to look for other
habitates
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habitats
 in the cosmos. for
instancr
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instance
, NASA has sent
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a couriosity
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couriosity
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curiosity
 rover to mars to search for
watter
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water
suppplies
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supplies
 on
this
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palnet
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planet
.
on the other hand
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, it is
one
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 of the key responsibilities of the
goverment
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government
 to introduce regulations to improve welfare in
the
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apply
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society.
one
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 of the
paramaunt
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paramount
 steps to reach
this
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 goal is
ti
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to
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 target poverty by offering
offering
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apply
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money, shelter and health support to poor households.
sdditionaly
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Additionally
 it is ethical to help
low income
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low-income
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 families in order to prevent them
suffering
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from suffering
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 from hunger, illness, lack of education or being homeless. in conclusion, launching
spacecrafts
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spacecraft
,
voyagers
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and voyagers
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 and investigating
on
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space exploration can be important.
however
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,
i
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I
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 would say that
aithirities
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authorities
 should
consuder
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consider
 fighting
with
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apply
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poverty as a target and spend money on that.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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  • technological advancements
  • national pride
  • global prestige
  • colonization
  • scientific knowledge
  • immediate impact
  • reduction of poverty
  • inequality
  • access to education
  • healthcare
  • human capital
  • equitable
  • sustainable
  • vulnerable
  • fostering
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