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Some people say that every human being can create art, for example painting. Others think only the people born with the ability can create art. Discuss both view and give your opinion?

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 been debates about inborn talents versus skills acquired through
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 since the beginning of time. Some are of the belief that artistic talents are something that a person was born with, whereas others think that it’s something that can be achieved through determined training and
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hardwork
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 perspectives. I personally believe that artistic knack is a combination of
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hardwork
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 and
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. On the one hand, there are a number of
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 that exist around us proving that being born with a special skill is
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 foreign to some people.
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, when you see a 2-
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 shows
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, you can’t help but be amazed by the innate
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 that
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 possess at
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 a young age. It’s no wonder why the
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, Mozart comes to our mind when we think of music, or Einstein when we talk about the geniuses of the world. They are gifted with that
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. They certainly have more natural aptitude than others in certain areas.
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, anyone can produce
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practice
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 and training. If
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 Been the case, there would never have existed
art
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 schools and arts as subjects in many schools and universities. One may not produce
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piece
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pieces
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 of
artworks
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 on their
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 or even
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 a couple of months but with continued
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 and perseverance, they can certainly accomplish works that they thought they ever could.
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, when
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 a beautiful
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 of
artwork
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 we tend to believe that the person who created that would be gifted. We ignore the fact that they might have
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 a long journey of
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hardwork
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hard work
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 to get there. In my opinion, even
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people with innate
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 to work on their skills to figure out how much they are capable of. |Even the most talented can lead
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 of oblivion if they don’t polish their
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 continued
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.
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], anyone with passion and determination can create unique pieces of
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. To sum up,
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talent
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 and
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hardwork
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hard work
 have a role in creating
art
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.
Both
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 are inextricably linked.
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, on balance, I believe that
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 of
art
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 is not limited to any particular individual.

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