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Some people prefer to be in the same kind of job their entire life, but others like to change their jobs frequently. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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 days, while many
people
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 believed that working in the same type of employment for their whole life, others take the view that
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humans
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 should explore different roles in various industries. In my opinion, sticking
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 the same career for a long time
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 might be comfortable with the working environment, but an individual cannot gain new knowledge in other streams.
On the other hand
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, there are
people
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 who believed that they play an important role because they are the pioneers of the company for decades.
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, individuals have strong confidence in getting
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 as they are familiar with the job scope and daily work process. Another reason is that some are not ready yet to challenge
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 new adventure by giving up their current and stable situation. As an example,
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the majority
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 of human beings are not willing to adapt
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new
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environment
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environments
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 and rather
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stay in
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 place
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where
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 they are friendly
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. Despite
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the above arguments, I am of the view that
people
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 should often change their employment
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their
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 early age.
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, if you are in your early
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, you have more energy to learn new things and you can absorb more challenges related to
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 scope of work.
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, according to my own perspective,
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the salary
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 increment range for the
people
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 who frequently switch their job is much higher than the
people
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 who remain unchanged
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 position.
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, it is my opinion that
individual
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individuals
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 might have the
chances
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 to accept the different exposure by swapping the role habitually. To summarize,
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 both arguments have their own merits, I believe that
people
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 should consider changing their job routinely.
This
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 will not only enhance your ability but
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 upgrade your skills.
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