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Some believe that charitable organisations should help people no matter where they live. Others argue that charities should only help those living in the country where the charity is based. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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According to
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 some individuals,
charities
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 should help only those
people
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 who live within their national boundaries;
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, others opine that they should provide assistance everywhere. In my opinion, it depends on the mission of the organization and its
resources
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. Well-funded
charities
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 can offer help everywhere; those
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 are short of
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 should prioritize their own
people
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. On the one hand, if NGOs decide to serve only the
people
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 of their country, we cannot quite blame them. After all, their
resources
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 come from the local
people
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 and as
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 when
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 money is utilized for the benefit of the locals, it is fully justified. Charitable work focusing on local issues
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 satisfies donors who are eager to see a resolution to the problems affecting their country or community.
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, many charitable organizations have limited
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.
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,
charities
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 operating in poor countries are often short of
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. They cannot provide help abroad. If they attempt to do
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, they will only antagonize the local community that funds their initiatives.
On the other hand
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, there are many international organizations flush with cash and other
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.
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, UNICEF is an international organization which aims to aid children worldwide. They receive funding from affluent countries and
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 they are quite capable of offering assistance in any part of the world. There are several
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 organizations that have the backing of developed countries. It is their moral and constitutional responsibility to provide assistance to needy
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 everywhere.
To conclude
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,
charities
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 should work with the objective of helping the needy. Whom they should help or where they should provide help depends on their financial situation and objectives.
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task response
Provide balanced arguments for both views and justify your opinion clearly.
coherence and cohesion
The logical structure is mostly coherent, but ensure that the progression of ideas is clear and easy to follow throughout the essay.
task response
Support each main point with specific examples and ensure that they are relevant to the discussion.
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