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Some people believe that teaching music in schools is a vital part of growing up and human experience whilst others believe that teaching music in schools is a waste of time and resources Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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The
subjects
of
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which a student should be taught in school is always a debatable topic,
therefore
 it is argued that
subjects
 like
music
 should be removed from the syllabus and give space for more useful
subjects
. It is my belief that the advantages of
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music
 as a mandatory subject in school outweigh the disadvantages and
music
 as a subject must be a priority
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 the syllabus.
Music
is
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usually
fall
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 under the artistic area,
this
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 means that people tend to underestimate the impact of
this
 topic,
moreover
, now people wrongly believe that the system
education
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 can omit
this
 critical area, but the importance of
music
 and artistic
subjects
in general
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 cannot be diminished, mainly because they allow creativity to flourish and imagination to develop. Undoubtedly, there are compelling arguments against
music
 as a subject in school.
Nevertheless
, from my experience and to give an example, I was taught to play the guitar
since
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 I was 10 years old and
this
 helped me to develop more ways to interact and to see the world from a different perspective of view, allowing me to think outside the box and often escape from reality through
this
 method. To sum up,
although
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subjects
such
 as mathematics and science are critical for a
child
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 development, arts
is
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 as important as a rationally-based education,
thus
,
music
 must continue as an important part of a
child
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 development and offer
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creative thinking among kids.
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