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Formal examinations are the only effective way to assess a student's performance. Continual assessment such as coursework and projects is not a satisfactory way to do this. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many societies around the world
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 that
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formal examinations are the best
way
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student
's performance and ability
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 their studies. But they
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 that the continual
assesment
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assessment
such
 as coursework and
homeworks
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homework
 is not a perfect
way
 to replace it. In my opinion, continual assessment
such
 as coursework and projects is not a satisfactory
way
 to evaluate
a
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students
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. Teachers and parents around us
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formal examinations like
an
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 mid-term exam and final exam
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only
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way
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student's
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 ability to
their
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 life work. But some
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 that it is not
only
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way
 to assess a
student
's performance.
For example
, most
of
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an
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old teacher agree with
formal
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 examination are the only
way
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student
's
ablity
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ability
 so
that
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they hold
a
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 exam to evaluate their children and young teacher believes that it is not
only
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way
 to evaluate them. But there is an advanced
way
 to assess a
performace
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performance
 these days. In Korea, there is a course named "evaluating each
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". Each
peers
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 in a classroom can evaluate each
others
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. They can classify each other with a predicted score, A, B, C and D. After scoring classmates,
explaing
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explaining
explains
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 about reason is necessary. Teachers will make a final decision to
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 students after "evaluating each
others
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"
are
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 finished. In conclusion, classifying a
student
's ability with formal examinations is not a perfect
way
 to assess a
student
's performance, and continual
assessment
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such
 as coursework, projects and homework cannot replace it. The best
way
 to assess each
student
's
performace
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performance
 is using the "evaluating each
others
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". Each
classmates
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 can motivate themselves by evaluating each
others
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other
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.
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