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In many parts of the world, families were larger in the past because people had more children. Do you think there were more advantages or disadvantages to being part of a large family in the past? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

having a big family was common, In
last
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 two hundred years ago.
Families
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 used to tend to believe that when they have more children that will give them a
lot
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 of advantages.In my opinion, A big family were and is and will be good for several reasons.
Firstly
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, Big
families
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 tend to
last
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 for several generations.
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example
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, wars killed a
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 of
people
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 and
families
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 who were big and sure will
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 for more years and small
families
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 disappear quickly.
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, diseases do the same effects and even more .For ,
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 Checkbox kill around A Hundred million in 1900. Big
families
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 were saved and lived longer.
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 is the most advantage that I believe help
people
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 to live until now. We have to be glad because of what the big family did for us.
secondly
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, having many members of
families
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 lead to gaining a
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 of economic advantages.
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, if I have many brothers and sisters we can do a
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 of business together without having
people
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 in our family .May I can grow vegetables and my family help me by selling them and the others cook them or exporting
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 product outside of our country.The huge income we will gain if we have a big family and fewer work hours we work . To sum up, the government should support
people
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 to have a
lot
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 of children and encourage them in any way by setting a law because that will have a
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 of many political and economic benefits for the country . India
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example
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 has the strongest economy due to its population's number.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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