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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is considered very important. Why might this be the case? Is this a positive or negative development?

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In some countries, the ownership of people’s homes is an important matter. In these countries, it is very important to own your own
home
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 rather than rent it. It might be indifferent to some, but for these people, it matters. Why is that the case? you might wonder. I think it is because your
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 is supposed to be exactly what it sounds like, your
home
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. As a human, I think we long after having the stuff to call our own, no matter what it is, but humans will always want to claim ownership.
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 is nothing new and it has been like
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 throughout human
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, like colonies
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, which later once again became. the same country as before led by its inhabitants. People will always want to be the ones to decide what happens to them and when you rent your
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 you cannot even paint it without the owners’ permission. If you as a person are renting an apartment there might be a lot of stressors in your life. A scratched wall can cause you a major headache because the wall was not yours. The bedroom you are currently sleeping in might not be available as long as you hope, things happen in life and maybe the
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 landlord will not want to have you as a tenant. From another perspective, not owning your
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 could be a relief when it comes to your finance. As a renter, you will not have to pay the mortgage, take loans or spend an awful lot of money on buying the property. You would not have to worry about the housing market crashing or a natural disaster destroying your expensive
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. Bottom line, as a human I feel like we need to have a
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, and calling it your own can make that more special. I personally would rather own my house, because
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 whatever happens it is on me and no one else.
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