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Some countries allow old people to work to any age that they want. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

#countries #people #work #age
Elder people
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 allowed
to
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work
by
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 many countries
in
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 any
age
. While there are negative consequences of
this
 notion, I would argue that these are outweighed by the advantages as it is good for old
ones
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 mental health. On the one hand, the main benefits of old people
work
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 at any
age
 is that they are more likely to be mentally healthier at jobs
instead
 of staying at home
all
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without doing anything productive.
In other words
, they might feel isolated at
homes
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 but in
workplace
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the workplace
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 when they interact with other employees which no doubt keep them away
fromthe
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from the
lonliness
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loneliness
.
For instance
,
nowdadys
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nowadays
 due to busy
worklife
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work life
work-life
 young individuals are devoting less time
with
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 old ones which
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 to affect their mental health somehow.
Thus
, if elder citizens indulge themselves in
work
, they not only feel happy and satisfied but
also
 they can contribute to
the
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society in
such
an
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old
age
 by earning money and
pay
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 taxes.
On the other hand
, it is undeniable that the processing ability of elderly individuals
have
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 been declined with time and
also
 they
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 the ability to think innovative. To elaborate, with the advancement of technology, they might
be
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learn new techniques and new systems to operate but
sometime
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 they can not process all of these due to
week
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 memory and their speed of learning tend to become slow.
As a result
, it
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 the company's growth and performance. In conclusion,
although
 there are various negative aspects of not
limit
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 the
age
 for
work
such
 as the processing ability which
is
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steadly
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steadily
steady
 decline with time and less
adaptance
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acceptance
adapting
of
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 new technologies,
but
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the merits outweigh the disadvantages due to the mental happiness which old ones
getting
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 from job and their contribution to the society if
government
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the government
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 allows them to
work
 at any
age
.
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