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As the world become technologically advances, computers are replacing people at more and more jobs. What are some job positions that may be lost because of computers? What are some problems that may result from this situation

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Automation has progressively increased as employers look to lower costs of production in the quest to have more efficient and profitable means of production.
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 that have been affected by the trend and some of the problems it has caused. The
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 that have been most affected by
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 are the ones that are labour-intensive, repetitive, and require limited skills and knowledge application. The
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 affected by automation include front-end positions like
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 service in shops, till operators, bank tellers, farm workers, street cleaners , and assembly line
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 just to name a few. Mechanization increases unemployment which has an indirect impact on issues
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 as crime, social cohesion , increased dependency on the government for financial support, and retraining costs associated with retraining laid-off employees.
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, other problems triggered by
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 include disengaged or dissatisfied customers who have to deal with computers , bots , and chatbots in resolving
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 service. The other problems include the lack of human interaction and engagement associated with automated
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 service positions may mean that customers become less loyal to brands and companies. A lot of companies that have automated
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 services and complaints systems ,often times have been affected by even higher levels of consumer dissatisfaction. In conclusion, whilst
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 is positive in reducing production costs and increasing profitability in companies, the negative consequences of
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 need to be managed and
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 may require the private sector to work closely with the government in retraining redundant employees and implementing policies that allow for a dynamic labour force.
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