the amount of time spend on sport and exercise should be increased in school in order to tackle the problem of overweight children do you think the best way to deal with the problem sir what others solution can you suggest.

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been a well-discussed topic recently in our society. Certain people explain that everybody should exercise with the purpose to improve their health.
Nonetheless
, others claim that
sports
don´t be learnt in schools. In my opinion, children should be encouraged to do different activities, and at the
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other solutions for
this
issue. On one hand, to augment time in
sports
it
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always is a marvellous and excellent
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.
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: It is well known that youngsters who
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some
sports
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exercise have better performance in
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educational establishments.
In addition
,
sports
such
as soccer, basketball or rugby help minors to have more fruitful relationships
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other. What is more,
they
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environment will be healthier than other juveniles
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practice any activity.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • Finally
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