The charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates the participation at three different venues and the table shows a variety of prices of the given places in the year 2009. Overall, It can be seen that cinemas were the most popular places for
entartainment
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entertainment
and the highest price per ticket was for the football game - AFL. In the
first
chart, more than 1000 people attended cinemas.
In contrast
, just under 200 humans went to sports venues for entertainment.
In addition
, theme parks were the
second
popular
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place to visit, which was at around 350 people. In the table,
football
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the football
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game - AFL made up the biggest price ticket both per person and for a family of four which were75$ and 298$ respectively. Meanwhile, the cheapest ticket can be seen visiting a cinema and
cost
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costs
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15$ per person and 55$ for a family group. Most of the prices of events for a
four member
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family were cheaper than
individual
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an individual
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one
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ones
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, compared to the kind of event, except for theme parks event.
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