some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together

while most
people
argue that opera is an important role in our lives.
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connects with other societies of cultures and
ages
. in my ,opinion I agree that
music
can be no matter what culture
people
are.
firstly
, in the world lot of different
country
people
are lived. if
people
don'
t
understand
music
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but
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are no problem because
people
understand the feeling of the
music
.
this
is how we can understand each other.
for example
, when I was 10 years old, my cousin always
listened
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English language songs I can'
t
understand
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anything
an anything
but a few months after I can be singing that song. it means that melody can be shared with other
people
in different languages.
On the other hand
, all
ages
people
listening different
music
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. because young
ages
people
listening trap, rock and rap
music
. but older
ages
people
listened to
music
in
country
songs. teenagers don'
t
like
this
kind of singing.
for instance
my mother like to sing
country
songs, but my younger sister like Blackpink which is a very different type of those. in the end,
people
can understand different
country
music
but different
ages
don'
t
understand each other for
music
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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