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There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children, Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couple who decide to do this.

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People
 nowadays
tends
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 to believe
about
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 the
princip
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principle
 of
legal
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 couple determined to
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a child
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child free
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.
Actually
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this
issues
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 getting bigger since a bunch of
influencer
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 stated their point of view to not have a baby.
Which
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 mean it
is bring
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a significantly
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significantly
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 effect
to
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 their follower. Here the essay will explain more regarding
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the demerit
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demerit
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 and merit of
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the couple
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couple
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couples
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 that follow the statement. The benefit by
join
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this
 trend for the
first
 is
probability
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the probability
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 of less
necessity
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fee
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of
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 growing
a
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children,
on
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 of the example they will not become a parent that should pay the cost of school.
Therefore
, they can focus on their career goal and treat better their wife or husband.
The
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second
,
people
 more freely
to
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do
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anything
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do anything
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 without any consideration
first
.
For
instance
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 they can go
to
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everywhere anytime.
Particulary
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Particularly
, if both of them become
a
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big fan
partner
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partners
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 of
dangerous
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the dangerous
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hobby
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hobbies
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. Meanwhile
for
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 the noxiousness
is
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people
 will
be feel
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feel
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 lonely in
the
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old age.
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,
people
 just lived with their partner.
This
 case sometime will
caused
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cause
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of
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boring and stuck for some reason.
Hence
,
potential
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 of having
fight
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 can
be happen
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.
The
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Next
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next
, no one will take care of them when they are getting older like the other family. To
sump
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sum
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 up the discussion, the better decision is
having
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to have
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 a baby and
grow
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growing
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 them well. As
human
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humans
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people
 can not live without
other
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others
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.
Therefore
, a couple should think twice before they totally agree to not have
a children
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children
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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