Thr most important consideraion when choosing any career or job is having a high income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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people
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think that earnings
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the most significant factor when choosing a
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.
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, I believe
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. Two arguments for disagreement and counterargument are explained in detail below
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the conclusion. Feeling happy and satisfied in
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is the purpose of all human beings. If somebody spends their almost whole day at the workspace, they want to be happy with what they are doing.
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why
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should be happy with what they are doing must be the most important factor when they are choosing a career path. Most
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life
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, work for a high income but
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of the day, they really understand that they are doing their
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to make ends meet. Long story short, everybody should consider whether they will love their
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or not before starting to train or educate themselves.
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, everybody should understand that, in
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life
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, they are not alone. They
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need to think about other
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. They can do or create wonderful things to make other
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's lives better. Doing something important
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the world a better place is more important than a high wage.
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, one of the best scientists and inventors in human history - Nikola Tesla invented so many new products and he never thought about money. He just wanted to make the
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of humans easier.
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, it is more important to consider whether someone is helping other
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with their work or not. On the other side, earning a high income is
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a necessity for the family. Everybody wants their family members to eat healthy food, want their children to have a decent education and want to have a comfortable
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without worrying about the future. That's why many
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carefully consider all their career options when they are young. In my country,
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are more likely to go for high-paying jobs because they think about their families first. In a nutshell, the family becomes one of the most important considerations when starting a new career. It can be concluded that I do not think that wage is the most important consideration when choosing a
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. The reasons are the importance of feeling happy at the workplace and the necessity of doing something great for humans.
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should not always think about money because they will never want less, always will want more and more.
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