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in many cities construction of new houses and office buildings is not controlled, and it leads to everybody building in whichever style they want without thinking about design. Do you agree that advantages outeeigh the disdvantages?

#cities #construction #houses #office #buildings #everybody #style #design #outeeigh #disdvantages
In many societies,
construction
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the construction
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 of new houses and
buildings
 is not controlled by governments, and the
buildings
' styles
depends
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depend
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 on
constructor's
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the constructor's
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 mind. Because of that, in case of
buildings
, especially apartments and houses in
Republic
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the Republic
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 of
Korea
 are
same
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the same
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each
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as each
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 other. In my opinion, government and departments should force constructors that
the
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apply
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design
 and
construction
 of
buildings
 should be various. Most apartments in South
Korea
 are
same
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the same
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,
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apply
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 so
that
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apply
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the atmosphere of the cities in South
Korea
 is boring. Present day in South
Korea
, major
construction
 companies
such
asSamsung
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as Samsung
construction
 is making an effort to
design
 apartments more
variously
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varied
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. In
Singapore
, government and the ministry of
construction
forces
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force
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to
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apply
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constructors to build
buildings
 variously, so that the
design
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designs
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 of
Singapore
's
buildings
 are different
each
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from each
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 other. Various
design
 leads
Singapore
's architecture quality
more
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apply
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higher. More than
a
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apply
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3.5 million
of
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apply
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tourists are entering
Singapore
 each year to see Marina Bay Sands hotel,
most
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the most
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 fabulous building in the country.
Variety
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A variety
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 of
design
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designs
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 will lead cities to be famous for
its
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their
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 atmosphere and residents will be happy to
expanded
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expand
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 options to
choose
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choosing
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 their
house
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houses
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.
In
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On
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 my occasion,
it
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I
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 was glad to choose my own house in various options for my apartment in Dongtan, Gyeongi-do.
Government
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The government
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 forced constructors to provide
the
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a
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 number of options to residents
,
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apply
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 so that residents can choose their own
house
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houses
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. In conclusion, governments and departments should force to construct
buildings
variouly
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variously
seriously
. It will increase the quality of architecture and gather visitors who are interested in architecture.
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