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Write about the following topic. Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 word

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Many societies believe that homeschooling is an effective way to teach
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 to increase their knowledge.
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, others think that the best improvement for students is when
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 to
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academy
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.
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study
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 is part of the important stages of society's lives to be earned by schooling. In
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learning facility that
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 homeschooling for recruitment in
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 to several aims to give
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 convenience.
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 with, homeschooling is a method of
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 easiness way to follow the
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 without really attending
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, they still can learn a lesson by themselves or they can hire a personal teacher or tutor to accompany them to
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. The important point of homeschooling is
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 can arrange their studying time based on their schedule, so that it is more flexible for them.
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 homeschooling is a solution for
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 their personal hobbies or carrier aside from schooling fields without leaving their
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. Take an example, nowadays, homeschooling
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 a famous solution for celebrities in procedure
to
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 they can catch both their career and
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 their learning.
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, some
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 think that
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 is the best method for
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student to develop their knowledge, because of several reasons.
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 can
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 better in
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academy
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 building, as schools have their curriculum and
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, both for
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theoretical
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the
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practical lessons.
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 can learn how to socialize with other
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 because they meet and get interaction with
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 or their teachers.
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the academy
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academy
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 is the best place for to children spend their time
to learn
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 everything for their scholarship. Mostly, in almost every country, the number of
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studying
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 at schools is much bigger than in homeschooling. In conclusion, I believe that learning is important for children because it can develop the way they are thinking. Personally, I prefer studying at
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academy
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 to homeschooling because in
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 the student can maintain a good improvement in
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 to well prepare for their future.
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