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some people think that mobiel phones are harmful for children while others disagree. discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is suggested that mobile phones in the hands of
youngsters
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 are detrimental to their development.
Children
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 who depend on smartphones will benefit from constraints, but it is possible that the more you
use
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 the device, the more you will realise how it impacts you.
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 article tends to agree that the
use
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 of
cellphones
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cell phones
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 by
youngsters
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 has a favourable effect on their development, so long as they are subject to certain constraints. Mobile phones play a significant role for
youngsters
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 who were required to have them for educational reasons.
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, some applications given by university professors or healthcare apps
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will assist the child with his self-care routine, confront all the obstacles on his own by reading some books or articles, and keep a notebook that will let him have a new start each morning with a list of objectives.
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, limiting
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's
smartphone
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use
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 will improve their quality of life as they develop. There may be alternatives to adopting a
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, which may harm
children
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's health. In certain cases, the blue light rays released by a
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's screen may create major troubles
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 a child's sensitive face, and excessive eye strain will result in dark circles beneath the eyes.
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 an inescapable consequence of relying only on
cellphones
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cell phones
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 for interaction with the real world.
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, should
children
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 who have only communicated via chatting for months or years transmit their ideas to each other in the same manner when they need to connect with themselves in
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? If left unchecked,
children
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 may develop no social skills, and it is heartbreaking to observe them with no abilities as they mature. Generally, examining the potential results of
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 using
cellphones
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cell phones
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 and debating its disadvantages. The most important component of
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 problem is that
children
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 should restrict their daily
smartphone
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use
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 in order to develop
abilities
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their abilities
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