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Рeople today spend less and less time interacting with other people in their neighborhood and this has a negative impact on communities. what are the possible causes and solutions to this problem?

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Nowadays communication among people is very little and a busy lifestyle leads to
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 problem A tough official routine is
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 sometimes social media waste our time and we don't have leisure time to spend with our neighbours.eventually having a good relationship with neighbourhoods is challenging in
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 industrial life. A good remedy to cope with
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 problem is starting to know each other and try to speak with our neighbours about our job and education
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 we can help them
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 we can make lunch for our neighbourhood.
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 if we start to visit each other we can repair our connection.
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 spend more time in the neighbourhood we can improve the quality of our life.
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