Today more and more people are using mobile phones and computers. Thus, people are losing the ability to communicate face to face.

Someone believes that
people
are losing the ability to communicate
face
to
face
since they are using mobile phones and computers more than
the
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past. I would argue that I disagree with
this
statement,
my
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opinions will be discussed
as
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for
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the following reasons. Nowadays, there are more methods of
communications
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communication
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available, especially mobile phones and computers.
Although
people
use
more these new technologies, they are still can see each other while talking.
Similarly
, talking to each other in person,
people
can see faces while speaking to their families or friends by using
cellphones
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cell phones
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.
For instance
, they can video call or FaceTime.
Moreover
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they can
use
applications
such
as Zoom, Microsoft Teams and
Skypes
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Skype
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to call
whoever
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they desire to see faces and talk to.
Therefore
, I disagree that
people
can communicate
face to
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face-to-face
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face
less when they
use
either their mobile phones or computers. In
additions
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, unlike in the past,
currently
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,currently
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people
are able to get closer without waiting for a long time to receive
the
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letters from their families, relatives, friends or customers. These
day
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people
are not only interface
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are not only interfacing
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faster, but they can
also
get closer since they
use
their
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either smart gadgets or laptops.
Hence
new technologies provide more conveniences for
long distance
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long-distance
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communication.
As a result
of the availability of these types of devices,
people
can connect and see faces even though they live far away from each
others
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other
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.
Consequently
, I do believe that
people
still can reach out better with these hi-tech
equipments
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types of equipment
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. In conclusion, new technologies
such
as iPhone, iPad or
Mcbook
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MacBook
not only be alternatives for
people
to contact
to
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each other,
they
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but they
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also
help
people
to connect better. With helping of these devices,
people
not only can see and understand
more
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apply
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each
others
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other
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, but they can
also
have
to
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too
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many options to connect to anyone regardless
how
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of how
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far they stay from each
others
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other
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. For that
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reason
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reasons
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I disagree that
people
are losing
ability
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the ability
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to communicate
face
to
face
by using
high
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highly
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technological appliances, but actually they have more abilities to connect and see each
others
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other
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because of using these devices.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • interpersonal skills
  • overreliance
  • digital communication platforms
  • convenience
  • efficiency
  • social bonds
  • enhance
  • bridging long distances
  • fostering connections
  • age groups
  • adept
  • integrating
  • landscape
  • emotional intelligence
  • nuances
  • striking a balance
  • limitations
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