Today more and more people are using mobile phones and computers. Thus, people are losing the ability to communicate face to face.
Someone believes that
people
are losing the ability to communicate face
to face
since they are using mobile phones and computers more than the
past. I would argue that I disagree with Change preposition
in the
this
statement, my
opinions will be discussed Correct word choice
and my
as
the following reasons.
Nowadays, there are more methods of Change preposition
for
communications
available, especially mobile phones and computers. Fix the agreement mistake
communication
Although
people
use
more these new technologies, they are still can see each other while talking. Similarly
, talking to each other in person, people
can see faces while speaking to their families or friends by using cellphones
. Correct your spelling
cell phones
For instance
, they can video call or FaceTime. Moreover
they can Add a comma
,Moreover
use
applications such
as Zoom, Microsoft Teams and Skypes
to call Fix the agreement mistake
Skype
whoever
they desire to see faces and talk to. Change the pronoun
whomever
Therefore
, I disagree that people
can communicate face to
Add a hyphen
face-to-face
face
less when they use
either their mobile phones or computers.
In additions
, unlike in the past, Fix the agreement mistake
addition
currently
Add a comma
,currently
people
are able to get closer without waiting for a long time to receive the
letters from their families, relatives, friends or customers. These Correct article usage
apply
day
Fix the agreement mistake
days
people
are not only interface
faster, but they can Change the verb form
are not only interfacing
are not only interfaced
also
get closer since they use
their
either smart gadgets or laptops. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Hence
new technologies provide more conveniences for long distance
communication. Add a hyphen
long-distance
As a result
of the availability of these types of devices, people
can connect and see faces even though they live far away from each others
. Change to a singular noun
other
Consequently
, I do believe that people
still can reach out better with these hi-tech equipments
.
In conclusion, new technologies Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
such
as iPhone, iPad or Mcbook
not only be alternatives for Correct your spelling
MacBook
people
to contact to
each other, Change preposition
apply
they
Correct word choice
but they
also
help people
to connect better. With helping of these devices, people
not only can see and understand more
each Correct quantifier usage
apply
others
, but they can Change to a singular noun
other
also
have to
many options to connect to anyone regardless Replace the word
too
how
far they stay from each Change preposition
of how
others
. For that Change to a singular noun
other
Fix the agreement mistake
reason
reasons
I disagree that Add a comma
,reasons
people
are losing ability
to communicate Add an article
the ability
face
to face
by using high
technological appliances, but actually they have more abilities to connect and see each Replace the word
highly
others
because of using these devices.Change to a singular noun
other
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