Many young people nowadays are imitating celebrities in sports and movies. In your opinion, is this good or bad? Support your point of view with reasons and examples from your own experience.

The scheme of allocating

money

is

hotly-debated

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topic in modern life. Several societies have

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the notion

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that keeping the

budget

in a

bank

is preferable, meanwhile,

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other groups say that we should use it every moment when we have it in our wallet.

This

essay shall elucidate those paradigms and peddle up the reason why the

first

contention is more valuable than the

last

option.

To begin

with, we will gain numerous benefits when our

money

is saved in a

bank

. To exemplify, our

money

will be saved in exceptional protection. It happens because numerous banks have good security

system

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like protection

personnels

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personnel

, the steel branch, etc.

Consequently

, we shall keep away from the risk

such

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that our

money

will be stolen

our

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or

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the disaster which will corrode our

budget

.

Furthermore

, we will gain profit from the

bank

rate every annual period because the

money

in our account will be exerted

for

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the

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economy

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activities. As an output, the banking institution will give us earlier profit, due to the fact we have given

trustness

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trusted

trusts

.

Nevertheless

, using our

budget

when it

is exist

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gives us several positive points.

For example

, when my

favorite

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singer announced that he will make

concert

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the concert

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, I should spend my

money

for

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on

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the tickets.

As a result

, the happiness

hormone like

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dopamine will

increased

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be increased

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because my desires have been accommodated.

Moreover

,

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exerting

money

whenever it is available makes us

to

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learn how to distribute the allocation cost for the priority business, that being the case, we might gain knowledge about the essential aspect

from

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of

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the art of

the

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money

management. In conclusion, keeping

money

to

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in

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the

bank

is a better determination than

fill

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our interests when we have coins in our pocket.

Although

, we shall achieve happiness,

however

, saving

money

might obliterate the risk

such

as catastrophe which shall destruct our

budget

or a thief who wants to steal it.

Then

, we are able to acquire the profit from the

bank

.