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Many beleive that living in a city offers greater benefits compared to life in countryside? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the public favour residing in an urban area because the city brings greater
values
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 compared to settling in the backwoods. I strongly agree that taking up residence in the downtown would increase someone’s value. The city is home to a wide spectrum of industries and markets. A wide range of financial activities takes place in urban towns
such
 as department stores, markets, hotels, and work. People tend to sell their product in a metropolitan area as it is visited by people not only from that particular town but
also
 from the countryside and other cities. The better access available to reach it, the more crowd and tourists to visit.
Moreover
, the wider the trade revolved in a town, the higher the employment rate will spike. People would be able to experience bigger opportunities and easily jump to various enterprises. Growing ventures need humans to operate their companies. As wanted human resources mostly come from renowned schools in the city, the company can easily employ high-profile graduates.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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